the following is the critique from other student to the attached paper
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The introduction of your paper was well put together and clear to understand. You made a relevant point by relating the need of restructuring to the fact that there have been technological advancements. It is interesting to see that public educations are faulted for the analytical and creative problems. It is true that the system of passing is pretty methodical. But that same system applies to those in higher education. Students study and get the grades based on how they do on papers and exams, so would the lack of skills come from those with public education or those without enough?
I agree with your point and some teacher not changing with the times to encourage a new system of learning. But based on a colleague of mine who is a teacher, there are those who are trying to implement new teaching styles are oftentimes encouraged not to change the status quo based on the current standards. Also, I feel that a little more explanation of what the TAG program would have been beneficial to drive your point home. Covering the costs of school are important and you made a good point about the fact that the price of the school does not mean quality.
Another part that could have used more detail is what you meant by the outdated system used decades ago. I understand that technology needs to be implemented and utilized to engage the youth, but what specifically about the system is outdated that is a hindrance to students?
I thought it was an interesting point to bring up the idea that homeschooling would be a viable option for students. The problem with homeschooling is the lack of accountability of whether the student is learning all of the material that they should be learning. Also, some of the problems you had previously discussed were students that were anti social. Being homeschooled can increase the likelihood that a person may struggle when working with groups and attempting to socialize.
Thank you for going over the Every Student Succeeds Act (ESSA). I had not previously known about this act. I think a couple of more details relating to how the program works can help the discussion. I think it is great that you touched on the increase of funding for education because we so often hear about the cutbacks that educational institutions are getting. It is refreshing to finally read about policies which promote it.
It is great that you were able to connect the current administration and the effect that it is having on the ESSA. The fact that there is a halt to the implementation of this act is disheartening. I had not previously considered the fact that a large portion of educational institutions had been preparing for the change in policy. If the policy is not implemented it would have been a waste of time and effort but hopefully those schools will keep some of the ideas in place and figure out ways of incorporating some of the new ideas without excessive spending.
Great paper Alaa! Thank you,